Today was the day.
Not in the sense that it was any special kind of day, just that it was the day Esmeralda would finally do what she set out to do.
She had called off work. “They don’t need me today,” she thought to herself in bed that morning. “They never need me.” So she stayed home.
In retrospect, perhaps she should’ve gone to work. Maybe something might have caught her eye and given her a final glimmer of hope.
She spent the morning laying in her black college futon watching television. She had never been one for furniture, definitely not one to decorate.
As the rain outside drowned the city’s noise, Esmeralda lost herself binge-watching Criminal Minds. It brought some sort of comfort to her.
As she lay there, the dormant feelings of rage, hate, and numbness fleshed out within her. She had had enough. Enough was enough.
The feelings overcame her. The feelings filled her. The feelings became her and she had become them. There was nothing anyone could have done.
So…today was the day. The rain grew louder. Thunder became incessant. The darkness overpowered the day. Esmeralda had succumbed.
Esmeralda never made a decision. It just wasn’t a question. At all. It sort of…just happened.
This doesn’t happen. Things like this don’t just happen. But they did. Today they did. Today was the day.
All it took was a kitchen knife.
*Written by Francisco Hernandez. All material is copyrighted.
— Read Chapter 1 HERE
Such a powerful piece. It goes to show that it does not have to be long to leave an impact. Keep up the great work Francisco!
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Hi Sinthia – Thank you so much! I really appreciate you taking the time to read the piece and leave a comment. I think that for this prologue I was able to find the exact moments that needed to be shared to capture the audience. The actual prologue in the book is a little longer, but I agree: short and to the point can make an impact. Stay tuned for what’s next!
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Very powerful Francisco. I could feel Esmeralda’s pain through your writing. Keep writing, this was very good!
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Thank you, I really appreciate that you took the time to read, and comment, on my little project. It means a lot to me.
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It’s short and right to the point. Thanks for sharing! 🙂 To answer your question from my post, I think you can leave in a prologue that’s short. It’s the super long fantasy ones that don’t amount to anything later in the book that are troublesome.
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Great point, thanks for checking mine out. I’ll consider the length as I flesh out the full chapter. These are just the strong bits that tie it together, but that’s definitely food for thought. Thank you!
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You’re welcome! Do you use Twitter? I have a lot of writing buddies on there. Sometimes I noticed I was able to work something I wanted to add into a prologue right into the story. It all depends on the situation.
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Yes! I just made a new twitter as a hopeful author and I’d love more writing buddies. It’s on my blog as well, but it’s @ciscosstories. I’ll find you. =D
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Omg! I jumped straight to chapter 1 and 2.. It kept me on edge! What a horrible childhood for Esmeralda!
I need to go back and read the prologue 😬
Awesome Work!
*miss your smile*
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Hi Nancy! Thank you so much for reading, I’m glad it kept you on edge. That’s what I’m going for! You’re so sweet. See you soon!
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I was reading this for at least 3 times and you keep making me wanting to read it all over again. You’re so talented Francisco! They way you write these stories makes me feel like I’m in them, I’m feeling them.
My favorite part was – “The feelings overcame her. The feelings filled her. The feelings became her and she had become them.”
That part was so powerful that I had goosebumps. Great work!
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Thank you so much Nick. I am thrilled that you enjoyed reading my pieces, and I sincerely hope you keep coming back for more!
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